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Author Topic: The Seraph's Betrayal (Prologue, Old Gods, and Durren Pt. 1)  (Read 44 times)

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The Seraph's Betrayal (Prologue, Old Gods, and Durren Pt. 1)
« on: April 21, 2012, 03:42:04 pm »
Criticism is welcome and encouraged.
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Re: The Seraph's Betrayal (Prologue, Old Gods, and Durren Pt. 1)
« Reply #1 on: April 21, 2012, 03:45:49 pm »
Noticed a couple spelling errors; fiercely is missing its 2nd e and so is layered. That aside, nice job.
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Re: The Seraph's Betrayal (Prologue, Old Gods, and Durren Pt. 1)
« Reply #2 on: April 21, 2012, 03:47:55 pm »
Any other ideas? :)
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Re: The Seraph's Betrayal (Prologue, Old Gods, and Durren Pt. 1)
« Reply #3 on: April 21, 2012, 03:52:01 pm »
I dunno yet, I'd have to see more first.
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Re: The Seraph's Betrayal (Prologue, Old Gods, and Durren Pt. 1)
« Reply #4 on: April 23, 2012, 02:15:42 pm »
Your **** font colors. Hurt my **** eyes. >:|

So I will not read it. xD
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Re: The Seraph's Betrayal (Prologue, Old Gods, and Durren Pt. 1)
« Reply #5 on: April 24, 2012, 04:18:04 am »
Same here but it's better now.
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Re: The Seraph's Betrayal (Prologue, Old Gods, and Durren Pt. 1)
« Reply #6 on: April 24, 2012, 10:32:55 am »
Well? Constructive criticism anyone?
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Re: The Seraph's Betrayal (Prologue, Old Gods, and Durren Pt. 1)
« Reply #7 on: April 25, 2012, 12:58:29 pm »
I like the style, but the first introductory post is confusing as hell.

Maybe you should rewrite it into a large wall of text legend to make things more clear?
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Re: The Seraph's Betrayal (Prologue, Old Gods, and Durren Pt. 1)
« Reply #8 on: April 25, 2012, 04:45:45 pm »
Any assistance? XD Would be greatly appreciated.
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