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Posted by: Twilightpersona« on: April 30, 2012, 07:16:19 am »Deja Vu is called Deja Vu for a reason.
 That chapter signals that the story will be back in the present again. Posted by: Parone92« on: April 30, 2012, 07:12:43 am »Pretty good story man. Although you could have done better with the Deja Vu chapter, i feel as though you just copied a lot from the first chapter. Overall very well done though, better than i could do.
Posted by: BlackRain« on: April 30, 2012, 06:52:35 am »While that is true, you're still improving.
Posted by: Twilightpersona« on: April 30, 2012, 06:06:34 am »Thanks. To be honest I don't see much of a difference between this addition and the one prior to.
Posted by: BlackRain« on: April 27, 2012, 09:45:14 am »Goooooood. xD You want me to muss up your story with another edit? You're starting to get the hang of it, though.
Posted by: Twilightpersona« on: April 26, 2012, 08:03:23 am »Albel your wish has been granted.
Posted by: BlackRain« on: April 25, 2012, 12:16:51 pm »... More, god damn it. >:C
Posted by: Twilightpersona« on: April 25, 2012, 09:20:22 am »I have added the little bit I wrote today. I will have more time to write it tomorrow. In the mean time, Albel, try to avoid destroying the author.....namely me.
Posted by: Twilightpersona« on: April 25, 2012, 04:03:02 am »I shall avert my demise and write more today.
Posted by: BlackRain« on: April 24, 2012, 10:21:05 am »Give me more. Or I shall destroy you. >:C
Posted by: BlackRain« on: April 20, 2012, 07:00:43 pm »Huh. Alright then. o.O
Posted by: Twilightpersona« on: April 20, 2012, 04:58:37 am »yea I based it off what I read of his description in his story.
Posted by: CrazyHobo« on: April 19, 2012, 09:56:27 pm »Vora's blonde.
At least that's what he told me: "I'm the only blonde male in Buenos Aires" Posted by: BlackRain« on: April 19, 2012, 02:49:18 pm »Pretty sure Vora has black/dark brown hair, but let's see if I can't edit this into proper shape with my brain like it is now...
After Mr. Logan was sure William was gone he pulled out his thin, sleek black cell phone and dialed a number. He spoke quietly into the phone,“It’s Vora,” which was met with a surprised response from the person on the other end. “Vora? It’s been a long time since we all heard from you Archlord… are you okay?” inquired the man on the other end. “Yes Igor, I am fine but there is no time for pleasantries, I have something you might want to see. Come to the high school across from West Side Apartments. Bring Albel with you as well; I believe he may be especially interested.” he replied. “Yes sir, on our way now," Igor responded, making sure his salute was in his voice. Posted by: Twilightpersona« on: April 19, 2012, 06:19:53 am »OK I added some more to the story. It's edited onto the end of the previous part to help set up for the next part. Just alittle extra details is all.
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